Maui and the fish writting

Maui and the fish retold

Maui lived in a small whare shared with his 4 brothers, Maui had very special powers that run through his blood. Maui’s brothers didn’t like him because he was better at everything they did.

One day while Maui was asleep late at night the brothers planned to go on a fishing trip the next morning without their  brother but Maui had  been listening and pretending to be asleep. When Maui’s brothers fell asleep Maui sneaked out of his whare and hid at the bottom of the brothers beautifully carved waka.

The next morning the 4 brothers rode  the waka out to sea past the breakers where the sea was calm slow the 4 brothers set out their fishing rods and waited then Maui made his entrance he sprung out from the bottom of the waka and gave his four brothers a massive fright. The 4 brothers were so angry they threw rods into the sea and yelled as loud as they could they were so frustrated because Maui had come fishing with them they just sat at the back of the boat did and nothing. Maui was not satisfied where the four brothers were going to go fishing so he paddled through the night using marama the moons moonlight to guide him. Finally when the sun came up maui stopped the waka. Maui had no bait so he gashed open his cheek with the tip of his magic jaw bone and smeared his warm red blood all over the jaw bone.  

Maui casted the jaw bone into the sea and it sank to the bottom with the speed of a bullet He caught his line on a tiko tiko on top of some sunken land. He thought it was a fish. He tried to heave the so-called fish up into the waka he said a karakia which made anything in the sea rise and it gave some mighty strenghth heaved  from the bottom but then he heard an almighty roar. Coming from the sea a massive beast rose up. He tried to eat Maui’s four brothers but Maui struck him in the eye with his taiaha. The beast roared and a massive tidal wave formed and headed straight towards Maui and his brothers waka.

Maui chanted a karakia as loud has he could and sent the tidal wave in the opposite direction.

Maui blessed his taiaha with a strong blessing he struck the great beast in the heart and it fell onto the sea and Maui said another karakia which made the great beast float on the top of the sea. Maui walked off to get his hook and that gave his four brothers a chance to start hacking the fish with their paddles

While the four brothers were hacking on top of the fish ruff(rough) mountain ranges and valleys started to form and is now known as the North Island.  

I am proud of this piece of writing because if have persevered and used refining muscle really well and it has great descriptive words. What challenged was using my refining and my perseverance muscle to get my writing to a gold level. Putting paragraphs in my writing was a little bit different for me because I don't usually do that in my writing.